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hamdam

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Behr ka kehr
« on: July 14, 2013, 02:01:55 PM »
Behr ke keher se kampte hain mere  dono paer,
Metre mein na likh pane se kampti meri fingers,
Lafzon ka wazan dhundte 2 ghat gaya mera wazan,
Ustaad log kahte hai bahut likh liya ab aage badao kadam.
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Re: Behr ka kehr
« Reply #1 on: July 14, 2013, 02:28:24 PM »
 :)
Behr ke keher se kampte hain mere  dono paer,
Metre mein na likh pane se kampti meri fingers,
Lafzon ka wazan dhundte 2 ghat gaya mera wazan,
Ustaad log kahte hai bahut likh liya ab aage badao kadam.
:) :) bahut khoob sanjay ji dil ki baat jubaan pe aa hi gai----haath pair mat kanpaaiye ji aa jayega ye hunar bhi----hum bhi isii line meiN haiN

 haar jaana teri fitrat nahi
 aadat bhi tark-e- ulfat nahi
behar ka kehar kyon maano
itni bhi koi dikkat nahi   -------------par ye bhi behar meiN nahi ji :)
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adiyo meri gaachi mukki
sukke hanjhu akkhaN waale
haaDa! akkhar mooloN kaale

Taish

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Re: Behr ka kehr
« Reply #2 on: July 15, 2013, 05:34:28 AM »
chaliye saaheb, isi bahaane sahi aap beh'r ke thoda aur kareeb to aaye....!! :)

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Re: Behr ka kehr
« Reply #3 on: July 15, 2013, 06:23:13 AM »
is behr k kehr se main bhi pareshan hun
aapne to mere dil ka dard likh diya sanjay ji...

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Re: Behr ka kehr
« Reply #4 on: July 15, 2013, 07:19:40 AM »
Jo dar gaya so mar gaya....

Aur abhi aap is qahr mei aaye kahan ho ..
Ye sirf behm hai.. Dar hai
Aur dar k aage jeet nahi behr hai :)

ye dar aage badhne hi nahi deta fikr ji,,,, yahi to kehr hai iska