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ridham

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intzaar
« on: June 27, 2014, 09:05:13 PM »
kyo.n naaraaz hoti ho
kisi ko kya tumhaari naraazgi se
aise hi har pal anjaane raahon par
chalne ki koshish karti ho
Thokar lagi na
ab kaun dekhega is riste lahu ko
chal chhod aa khud hi sahla le
apni chot ko

jaanti hooN aksar jab aise chot lagti hai
to bahut dard hota hai
par afsos to ye ki is chot ki koi marham bhi to nahi
kaun dawaa kare
kis ko pata
chot kab lagi kaise lagi
tum bhi to ho na
bus bin bataaye naaraz ho jaati ho
chaand ko pakadne ki koshish karogi to aunde moonh hi to girogi
tum sochati ho chand sirf tumhara hai
are pagli ,,chand to sab ka hai
virhan ka kabhi kisi kavi ka kabhi kisi bache ka
par jaanti ho pakad koi bhi nahi paya chand ko
chal aisa kar ek tasveer lete haiN poornima ke chaand ki
use roz dekhna
jee bhar ke dekhna
tasveer to teri apni hai na
jab chahe pyaar kar,,jab chahe baat kar ,,jab chaahe lori suna
jab chahe mantar mugad si bus dekhti rah
koi nahi rokega ,,koi nahi tokega ...koi nahi cheenega
chal so jaa bahut raat hui ab to chand bhi dhundlaane laga hai
alsa gai haiN aankhei.n uski
raat bhar pahra jo deta hai
bad raha hai wo bhi
ujaale ki taraf
kisi sooraj ki nai kiran dhoondne
jaanti hai ,,,chand aisa hi hota hai
vebafa
roj nai kiran talashta
ab chand ka kya saari raat jaaga
din bhar soya
tujhe to jaagna hai
din meiN bhi
chaand ke aane ke intzaar meiN
or phir pahro pahar chaand ke saath saath
dekha baaton baatoN meiN darad kam hua na
chal ab nihar apne chand ki tasveer
or so ja ,,,shabaa khair


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Re: intzaar
« Reply #1 on: June 28, 2014, 09:14:54 AM »
dear Ridham ...abhi bhi wahi dard mehsoos kar rahi hooN ,,,jo toone in ehsaasoN meiN sanjoiya hai
chaand ko pakdna ,,,sach meiN itna aasan hota to kab se chura liya hota ab tak kisi ne....  chalo mehfooz raho apne tasweeri chand ke saath :)
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Re: intzaar
« Reply #2 on: June 29, 2014, 12:16:43 PM »
Hmmmmm

For me

Dard bahut khoobsurat he..ye aapko bahut kuch sikhata  he.....:)
Aapka likha bahut pyara he
But one thing i saw that
The yr write up form somewhat like helix structure....resembling the structure of DNA strand :)...the smallest unit of life....hmnn...:)
Aapki rchnaa zindgi liye he..jiye jaaiye..:)
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Vekh lya main jugnu phd ke
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Re: intzaar
« Reply #3 on: July 03, 2014, 02:47:17 PM »
dear Ridham ...abhi bhi wahi dard mehsoos kar rahi hooN ,,,jo toone in ehsaasoN meiN sanjoiya hai
chaand ko pakdna ,,,sach meiN itna aasan hota to kab se chura liya hota ab tak kisi ne....  chalo mehfooz raho apne tasweeri chand ke saath :)
ji sahi kaha aap ne

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Re: intzaar
« Reply #4 on: July 03, 2014, 02:54:42 PM »
Hmmmmm

For me

Dard bahut khoobsurat he..ye aapko bahut kuch sikhata  he.....:)
Aapka likha bahut pyara he
But one thing i saw that
The yr write up form somewhat like helix structure....resembling the structure of DNA strand :)...the smallest unit of life....hmnn...:)
Aapki rchnaa zindgi liye he..jiye jaaiye..:)
hmmm...hum achhe se samajh ni paaye ..aap kya kahna chahti hain .plz clearly bataaiye.aise laga jaise science ki class chal rahi ho.aap ka comment plz dowara dijiye.àap ne hamein pada comment kiya bahut acha laga hame koi ni padta yahan :(