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shabdaaN naal maiN kaaj rachaaiya
« on: June 27, 2014, 06:57:09 PM »

SAJJAN JI asaN doweiN  Ral ke ..fir to viunt banaiye
kujh shabdaN da mel kraa ke chal koi kaaj rachaiye

सज्जन जी असां दोवें रल के फिर तो विऊंत बनाइये
कुझ शब्दां दा मेल करा के चल कोई काज रचाइए

sajjan ji tusaN mehndi vele shabd na bhijjane paaye
chal chhaD, suche moti varge shabad hi hath sajaaiye

सज्जन जी तुसां मेहँदी वेले शब्द न भिज्जने पाए
चल छड ,सुच्चे मोती वरगे शब्द ही हथ सजाइये

sajjan ji ki ghoDi chaDde shabdaN  moonh juThaiya
chal hun paan gilori vich rakh shabdaN nu  chabb jaaiye

सज्जन जी की घोडी चढ़ दे शब्दां मूंह जूठाइया?
चल हुन पान गिलोरी विच रख शब्दां नु चब्ब जाइए

sajjan ji asaaN  chaaro laawaN shabdaN sang lai laiyaaN
shabad ta mere  chir to haani doli vich paa  chaiye

सज्जन जी असीं चारो लावां शब्दां नाल लै लईया
शब्द तां मेरे चिर तो हाणी ,डोली विच पा चाइए

sajjan ji jad paani baare shabad paawe maa kujje
ehna shabadaN var liya mainu chal hun  mangal gaaiye

सज्जन जी जद पानी बारे शब्द पावे माँ कुज्झे
एह शब्दां ने वर लिया मैनू,चल हुन मंगल गाइए

sajjan ji kangne diyaN gandhaN  shabadaN taaiN  piroiaaN
khed,  kholke kangna hun ta,,peeD nu jholi paaiye

सज्जन जी कंगने दियां गंडा, शब्दां ताई पिरोइया
खेड, खोल के कंगना हुन ता ,,पीड नु झोली पाइए

sajjan ji hun shabdaN nu koi preet da rang chaDaawo
kujh shabdaN de khol kaleeDE MuD ke sej vichhaiye

सज्जन जी हुन शब्दां नु कोई प्रीत दा रंग चडावो
कुझ शब्दां दे खोल कलीडे मुड़ के सेज विछाइए

sajjan ji eh sej vichhi e kore shabdaaN waali
baiThe shabad jo   pahan pachar ke  kujh maile kar jaaiye

सज्जन जी एह सेज विछी है कोरे शब्दां वाली
बैठे शब्द जो पहन पचर के ,कुझ मैले कर जाइए

sajjan ji meri sakhani jholi shabdiN hi bhar devo
fer hi koi geet ghazal ya nazmaN kukkhoN jaaiye

सज्जन जी मेरी सखनी झोली शब्दी ही भर देवो
फेर ही कोई गीत ग़ज़ल या नज़्म ही कुखों जाइए

sajjan ji asiN pyaar ch range shabdaN nu rang jaaiye
muD na 'rashmi'  geet virhaDa fir aapaN koi gaaiye

सज्जन जी असीं प्यार च रंगे शब्दां नु रंग जाइए
मुड न  ,रश्मी, गीत विरहडा फिर आपां कोई गाइए

Rashmi Sharma

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Re: shabdaaN naal maiN kaaj rachaaiya
« Reply #1 on: June 28, 2014, 08:40:42 AM »
ye to pahle sunni hai.... aap hi ki awaaz main..... ek ek lafz ek ek misra..........

hath pair main ajeeb sa ho raha hai padh ke.....
  shukriya Vikas ,,,, ji nahi ye kal hi paida hui hai abhi ,,,bahut chhoti hai meri bachi,,,aap tak kahaN pahunchi hogi is se pahle ,,,, :)


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Re: shabdaaN naal maiN kaaj rachaaiya
« Reply #2 on: June 28, 2014, 08:52:49 AM »
Bahut Vadhia. .shabdaN da milaap

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Re: shabdaaN naal maiN kaaj rachaaiya
« Reply #3 on: June 28, 2014, 05:48:48 PM »
ye to pahle sunni hai.... aap hi ki awaaz main..... ek ek lafz ek ek misra..........

hath pair main ajeeb sa ho raha hai padh ke.....
  shukriya Vikas ,,,, ji nahi ye kal hi paida hui hai abhi ,,,bahut chhoti hai meri bachi,,,aap tak kahaN pahunchi hogi is se pahle ,,,, :)


Mera matlab ye sun'ni hai padhne se pahle
kab , kahaN kaise ? kahiN main sapne me to ni suna gai  :)

wo shayad ye waali hogi ,,,,,,,, chal aapaN hun akkhar bijiye
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Re: shabdaaN naal maiN kaaj rachaaiya
« Reply #4 on: June 28, 2014, 05:56:38 PM »
सज्जन जी तुसां मेहँदी वेले शब्द न भिज्जने पाए
चल छड ,सुच्चे मोती वरगे शब्द ही हथ सजाइये

:)) waah

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Re: shabdaaN naal maiN kaaj rachaaiya
« Reply #5 on: July 03, 2014, 10:24:05 AM »
ye to pahle sunni hai.... aap hi ki awaaz main..... ek ek lafz ek ek misra..........

hath pair main ajeeb sa ho raha hai padh ke.....
  shukriya Vikas ,,,, ji nahi ye kal hi paida hui hai abhi ,,,bahut chhoti hai meri bachi,,,aap tak kahaN pahunchi hogi is se pahle ,,,, :)


Mera matlab ye sun'ni hai padhne se pahle
kab , kahaN kaise ? kahiN main sapne me to ni suna gai  :)

wo shayad ye waali hogi ,,,,,,,, chal aapaN hun akkhar bijiye
haha...pata ni kai baar hum shabdoN ko apne nazriye se hi dekhte rahte hain.....do baar maiN samajh hi ni paai ...ke aap kya likh rahe ho....sory for my foolishness. .....or shukriya mujhe jhelne ke liye  ... :)
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Re: shabdaaN naal maiN kaaj rachaaiya
« Reply #6 on: July 03, 2014, 04:39:23 PM »
kya baat hai Rashmi ji ,

Ab pata chalta hai ki  tuhanu poetry virasat.vich mili hai.
Kamaal hai tusi  shabadan naal poora mangal karaj rachaya.
sirf uthe tak hi nahin ,  tusi uston agge diya rasma vi  nibhayiana.

bahut achche ..keep it up.

Sanjay Sehgal

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Re: shabdaaN naal maiN kaaj rachaaiya
« Reply #7 on: July 05, 2014, 10:48:48 AM »
Bahut Vadhia. .shabdaN da milaap
shukriya ji
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Re: shabdaaN naal maiN kaaj rachaaiya
« Reply #8 on: July 07, 2014, 06:25:19 PM »
kya baat hai Rashmi ji ,

Ab pata chalta hai ki  tuhanu poetry virasat.vich mili hai.
Kamaal hai tusi  shabadan naal poora mangal karaj rachaya.
sirf uthe tak hi nahin ,  tusi uston agge diya rasma vi  nibhayiana.

bahut achche ..keep it up.

Sanjay Sehgal
Sanjay ji behad shukriya aapka ,,,ek punjaabi hi punjabi rasmoN ko bhi behtar   samajh sakta hai ji
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Re: shabdaaN naal maiN kaaj rachaaiya
« Reply #9 on: July 08, 2014, 04:38:43 PM »
rooh tak asar hey kitta
shabad nahin labh rahey ki kahiye

hats off

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Re: shabdaaN naal maiN kaaj rachaaiya
« Reply #10 on: August 14, 2014, 06:39:53 AM »
Samajh me to kam aayi .. lekin bahot achchhi lagi... :-))
मोमिन न मैं फ़िराक न ग़ालिब न मीर हूँ
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Re: shabdaaN naal maiN kaaj rachaaiya
« Reply #11 on: August 14, 2014, 10:50:27 AM »
Aahaaa rashmii ji...bahut khoobsurat..bahut yi
Sach..ik ik shabd...aahaa..bahut umda

Aur fikr ji ki trhaaaaa..mujheee bhi yahii lgaa ke pehle kahaan suna

Isme kahiiin kahiiin maheen si jhalak shiv ke lekhn si pdh rhi he..shayad isliye
zoya****

Lau  hi lau sii ..... saik nhi si
Vekh lya main jugnu phd ke
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Re: shabdaaN naal maiN kaaj rachaaiya
« Reply #12 on: August 15, 2014, 11:42:34 AM »
Samajh me to kam aayi .. lekin bahot achchhi lagi... :-))
[/quot] Sagar ji jab samajh ni aai to achhi kaise lagi ???????  :/
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Re: shabdaaN naal maiN kaaj rachaaiya
« Reply #13 on: August 15, 2014, 11:46:29 AM »
Aahaaa rashmii ji...bahut khoobsurat..bahut yi
Sach..ik ik shabd...aahaa..bahut umda

Aur fikr ji ki trhaaaaa..mujheee bhi yahii lgaa ke pehle kahaan suna

Isme kahiiin kahiiin maheen si jhalak shiv ke lekhn si pdh rhi he..shayad isliye
Shukriya Venus ...aap ko mera likha pasand aaya ...thanks a lot.....par aap bhi vahi ghalti kar rahi haiN jo maine ki ....dhiyan se  vikas ke reply ko duwara tiwara  padiye ..   :) :) :)
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« Reply #14 on: August 15, 2014, 01:45:39 PM »
arrey matlab aaya bhi samajh me.. koi koi word nahi pata lekin achchha laga padh ke.. abhi dobara padha to aur achchha laga :-))
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