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ChakreshSingh

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Lets try and say it this way My love
« on: May 24, 2014, 09:18:05 AM »
All I see I wish I want is you Your lilac perfumed hair
Your silky touch your breezy talks your intensely sharp stare

My love I live and live for you Would you ever know
I long for you your caress voice In front of thee I bow
Your tender hug, your warmth I seek in silence as I pass
A glimpse of you dangles in my dreams a picture to and fro..

What's hidden from you Princess of my soul I stand here so bare
All I see I wish I want is you Your lilac perfumed hair

I know my dear you can't stop and time pulls us all
When life gets real seasons pass and dreams have their fall
I know my love all you didn't say all I should feel and leave
But if you get low or need a hug pick your phone and call..

I know not what heavens want but I wish we were a pair
All I see I wish I want is you Your lilac perfumed hair...
~ckh
« Last Edit: May 24, 2014, 09:28:02 AM by ChakreshSingh »

Rashmi

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Re: Lets try and say it this way My love
« Reply #1 on: May 24, 2014, 05:01:17 PM »
Very nice...true feelings ....keep writing ......certionaly we r in wait of your poetry
 
Rashmi Sharma

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Re: Lets try and say it this way My love
« Reply #2 on: May 27, 2014, 03:20:45 PM »
All I see I wish I want is you Your lilac perfumed hair
Your silky touch your breezy talks your intensely sharp stare

Dear Chakresh ,

you first two lines wee indeed beautiful  but later you lost the rythm  totally .

Emotions are goof but pls work more on the flow in English poetry .

viz //  The moment you smiled , my heart was wild ,
          I was soaring high and high up in the sky ,
          suddenly the reverie was broken by a sigh ,
          I found you standing near by .
          You bent and wispered into my ear ,
          I love you dear   


Keep polishing .. /good luck

regds
sanjay sehgal




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Re: Lets try and say it this way My love
« Reply #3 on: May 30, 2014, 10:26:22 AM »
Very nice