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Taish

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He Was a Lover...!!
« on: June 24, 2013, 03:48:22 PM »
people had started,
calling him a mad.
the more they called him,
the more love for her he had.

he was in love,
more than he knew.
with every look of her,
like nething it grew.

he wanted to propose,
having in the eyes a glow.
but word were unwilling,
so he said with xpression,s flow.

he had thought that,
all around was only lovesick air.
but his thoughts came to halt,
when she gave him an unseen stare.

hated by all,also by her,
all,even her to hate.
by that comes my motto,
and may be that's my fate.

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Re: He Was a Lover...!!
« Reply #1 on: June 26, 2013, 10:54:12 AM »
nice   :) :)
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haaDa! akkhar mooloN kaale

Taish

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Re: He Was a Lover...!!
« Reply #2 on: June 26, 2013, 06:15:22 PM »
thans a tonne rashmi ji...!!

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Re: He Was a Lover...!!
« Reply #3 on: July 02, 2013, 09:46:48 AM »
bhai  bahut sad poem hai...sob sob sob  my heart is crying for
your lover

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Re: He Was a Lover...!!
« Reply #4 on: July 02, 2013, 09:57:28 AM »
people had started,
calling him a mad.
the more they called him,
the more love for her he had.

he was in love,
more than he knew.
with every look of her,
like nething it grew.

he wanted to propose,
having in the eyes a glow.
but word were unwilling,
so he said with xpression,s flow.

he had thought that,
all around was only lovesick air.
but his thoughts came to halt,
when she gave him an unseen stare.

hated by all,also by her,
all,even her to hate.
by that comes my motto,
and may be that's my fate.

ahaaa what a creation ? Superb,  touching my heart...!!
« Last Edit: July 16, 2013, 04:12:02 AM by Taish »

Taish

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Re: He Was a Lover...!!
« Reply #5 on: July 04, 2013, 09:40:03 PM »
bhai  bahut sad poem hai...sob sob sob  my heart is crying for
your lover


frankly speaking that has to be one of the best and most felt replies I have read for ne of my English poems, so thanks a tonne sir...!!

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Re: He Was a Lover...!!
« Reply #6 on: July 10, 2013, 05:33:37 PM »
nice

Taish

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Re: He Was a Lover...!!
« Reply #7 on: July 16, 2013, 04:12:32 AM »
people had started,
calling him a mad.
the more they called him,
the more love for her he had.

he was in love,
more than he knew.
with every look of her,
like nething it grew.

he wanted to propose,
having in the eyes a glow.
but word were unwilling,
so he said with xpression,s flow.

he had thought that,
all around was only lovesick air.
but his thoughts came to halt,
when she gave him an unseen stare.

hated by all,also by her,
all,even her to hate.
by that comes my motto,
and may be that's my fate.

ahaaa what a creation ? Superb,  touching my heart...!!

the pen must be blessed while witing it as it touched ur heart maam, hope to contnue writing like this, keep blessing me the same way...!! :)

Taish

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Re: He Was a Lover...!!
« Reply #8 on: July 16, 2013, 04:13:17 AM »
nice

a pleasure to know that you liked it sir...!!

AahnaA

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Re: He Was a Lover...!!
« Reply #9 on: July 30, 2013, 05:25:59 PM »
a story of unexpressed love.... a feel every person have faced in their life... beautifully expressed taish ..

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Re: He Was a Lover...!!
« Reply #10 on: June 04, 2014, 07:35:05 AM »
Lovly.....  Heart touching

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Re: He Was a Lover...!!
« Reply #11 on: June 04, 2014, 02:46:41 PM »
Hmmmm
Fate....hmmmm..fate...wat to say abt it
Nice poem
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Re: He Was a Lover...!!
« Reply #12 on: June 18, 2014, 11:49:38 AM »
Many have lost love due to failure of confession.
Very good try. The expressions and feelings are there but the dept can be felt more with greater choice of words.

Keep writing. Bless you.
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Taish

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Re: He Was a Lover...!!
« Reply #13 on: July 03, 2014, 11:56:15 AM »
Thanks for the support and encouragement frnz, but its a poem written long back, around the time when I was in school, so the immaturity is inevitable... Will still try to be better they next time I try writing something in English...